Group Essay Collaberation

Other than tweaking some things, my paragraph is pretty much the same as what you saw on Friday. for our conclusion, the messages that I think are behind his funny portrayal are that you shouldn’t just do things because of what other people will think, but for yourself, and also that you shouldn't just do something for self gain, but think about the impact it will have on other people. Any other ideas? Other than finishing our conclusion, I don't really have any questions. I think that both your paragraphs are really good, and the biggest challenge will be to get it to flow. Also, how are we going to include epigrams and aphorisms? Does anyone have any in their paragraphs?

New years Resolution

   This New Years, I hadn't really thought much about what my resolution would be, but I can always think of something that will make my life better. So, for this new year, my goal will be to one, do all of my math homework. I know I should have been doing this already, and its easy enough, so why not? I don't know. I guess I felt a little over loaded, but the thing is, I didn't have that much other work to do, so I have come to the conclusion that I was just being lazy. I think that in doing all my homework, the quality of my life will go up, when I do my homework, I feel kind of proud that i did it. Also, by doing my homework, and then getting a good grade, it will help me reach my other goal of getting a 4.0. And two, to go running more. I've been telling myself that I'll go running more when the weather gets nicer, but that could be never, so I need to just go out and do it. The reason that I should go running more is simple, exercise is good. I find that when I go running, I feel a lot better, about myself, and I'm just in a better mood all around. I feel like I've accomplished something, by getting out and doing something. So for this new year, I will do my math homework every day until the end of school, and I will run at least every week to improve the quality of my life in many ways.

Evaluations

1. Angela-pyramid

    I think that the overall picture is good. Just by looking at it, you can't really tell whats going on, so it's good that there is an explanation. The explanation explains well and I liked how she said that the animals intentions were good. There is also a good interpretation of pigs being like men in a way. I liked it a lot!

2. Adora-poem

    I really like this poem! It was very well written, and I liked how it seemed to have deeper meaning, than just what the words said. I liked how the poem had relevance to the real world as well as the book. Really well done.

3. Emily- pyramid

    I think that this is a very good representation of how the animal farm is similar to the Russian Revolution. It is very easy to understand, just by looking at it. Even though this project didn't really show all the literary elements, I really liked it, and thought it was very well done.

4.Davis- slide-show pictures

    I really liked that this project was different that a lot of the other ones that people did. I thought that the comparisons of the characters in Animal Farm to major people and concepts in the Russian Revolution really worked well to show the relationship.

5. Andrea-video/comic strip

    I loved the comic strip! It was soo well done, and I really liked how the picture and the words said different things, like they were saying one thing and doing another. I didn't really get the movie though. Really well done!

6. Leanna-picture

    I liked how she made her own pig, and how it was easy to understand. I thought that the way she oriented it was very good in showing the relationship. I also thought that it was cool how she made it clear that it was mirrored to the Russian Revolution.

7. Paden-picture

    I liked how this picture shows that the pigs them selves might not have been that bad, but the power was just too much. It was very creative, and thoughtful. I also liked how it shows how the pigs got corrupted.

8. Levi-video

    I liked how this project showed Animal Farm from the peoples point of view. It shows a clear understanding of the book. It also talks about the relationships between Animal Farm and the neighboring farms.

9. Thomessa- picture

    This project was really good! I thought it was good that she showed the change in the commandments, it illustrated the corruption of Animal Farm very well

10. Kayla and Kelsey-comic strip

      I think that this project really shows that the pigs were in power from the beginning. I liked how they showed all the aspects of the corruption through one part in the novel.

Me- I think that compared to everyone else's, my project was pretty good. Emma and I put a lot off work in to our movie and I think it was worth it. Some of the other projects were really good, and i could tell they put a lot of work into theirs as well. One thing I think could have been better was that our movie didn't really show clearly the literary elements in the book.

Poerty Out Loud- Online

Part One:

1. Carmel Highlands

2. Let it Be Forgotten

3. A Barred Owl

4. a. Fairy-Tale Logic

b.Barter

Part Two:

I liked "Carmel Highlands" because it had a lot of detail and I felt like I really could relate.

I didn't really like "Let it Be Forgotten" because it was too short and for me, it was too literal.

I would really like to study "Carmel Highlands" further. I would choose this one because it has so much detail.

I felt like I connected to this poem because she takes simple things like trees and stones and creates a deeper meaning. I've seen lots of trees and stones and water, because I love to be outside, but I have never thought of those things in the way she describes them.

Part Three:

For the criteria, I think that the easiest part will be to make the meaning stand out- to help the audience understand. The hardest part for me will probably to act confident, and to project. I think that the criteria is clear and that all the things that you need to do make sense for a good poem read out loud.

Part Four:

The first video I watched was Carolyn Rose García reading Pied Beauty by Gerard Manley Hopkins she was good because it didn't seem like she was reciting the poem, but telling it, and making you understand. It was good, but I didn't really like the poem, and I thought it could have been longer. The Second one that I watched was Frederick Douglass by Robert E. Hayden recited by Shawntay A. Henry, Hers was good because she made me like the poem. She commanded my attention, and made me understand. She also paused in the right places and emphasized the right words so that it sounded really good.Part Five:

For the competition in class, I'm going to do one that I didn't look up, but found in a book. It is called The Darkling Thrush by Thomas Hardy, and I picked it because I liked how it spoke about something that it wasn't literally talking about. I liked the how in it. When I first heard about poetry out-loud, I thought of it as just reciting poems, but now that I have read more about it, it seems like so much more, like the bringing of life to a poem, a different way of thinking about it.

  

Somthing Interesting

One thing that I found interesting from our "Lobsters" discussion in class was that in the second group, it was brought up that when the humans take the lobsters in the poem is like when humans were slaves. When white people used to take slaves, they would take them from their 'habitat' where with their skin color, they blended-in, it worked well for where they were, and took them to a place where their skin color, helpful as it might be where they used to live, stuck out, and made them very noticeable for their difference.

       When I heard this, I was in the outer circle, and thought is was very interesting. When I thought about it more, I realized how much it made sense. The whole time I had been reading Lobsters I had been thinking about it as comparing lobsters to humans in general, but narrowing it down to this part in humanity just fit. The lobsters are described as being not knowing, or being able to change anything, and also as being "made available to the buyer" all of these things could be applied to a slave being taken from their home and being sold, and not being able to do anything about it. Thinking about this more has given me a whole new perspective on this poem and a whole new way to think of it.

Urgent Blog

Before I read this blog, I wrote a little bit of my paragraph already and when I read my 5 part paragraph blog over, I realized that I had already made the same mistake that I wrote about! Its sooo easy to smash the transition and the embedding together, and you have to be very very careful not to do it, and it can be really very hard sometimes.

5 Part Paragraphs

            So, here's what I think. I was very impressed while listing to my classmates reading their 5 part paragraphs. To be honest, they were a lot better than I thought they would be, but still, like in any good collection of writing, there were a few flaws. One thing that I saw over all was that a lot of people kinda smashed their transitions together with the quotes and their embedding’s. I think that it is easy to get those mixed up, but also very easy to fix if they just use the resources provided for them- the whole paragraph packet and also all the people around them. Some other things I noticed were that a lot of people used select words in their papers over and over again, like they were trying to prove the point, by saying words like "racism" and "innocent" a lot. One more thing was that I think some people picked one word to describe their topic and tried to apply it by using it in weird ways, when if they really had understood what it meant, and how it applied, they could have phrased it differently.

            As for me, I was very confident as I went up to read my paper, and found out that it wasn't as perfect as I thought it was, and that just goes to show that you have to use your resources, it’s really easy  just get someone to read over your paper and have them tell you what they think. I'm relatively happy with how my paragraph turned out, and glad that everyone was so honest when critiquing, instead of just saying that it’s good. In conclusion, I think that if everyone had really used their resources to the fullest, all the papers would have been even better than they already were.